2007年3月18日 星期日
A night market
I went to a night market with my friend on Saturday. I bought a shirt and pants. Actually it cost 780 dollars, but she only charged me 680 dollars, so certainly I bought it. I' m so lucky because it looks so pretty. And then we went to eat beefsteaks, it only cost us 100 dollars. We felt satisfied and wanted to go there second time because it was so delicious. We had good time today; I think we will go there again soon.
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Hi there Lily,
Here are some comments on your writing.
I notice a number of what look like careless mistakes, such as comma splices (Subject-verb comma subject-verb) which should be fixed with semicolons, the insertion of an article, or a period. [...beefsteaks, it...] Also, missing articles and subjects. ["we had good"... and "go there second..."] Also an extra space in "I'm." However, it's good to see paragraphs (though minus indentations). However, you only have half the number of posts you should have (12+)! That's a shame.
Grade: 68
See you Monday--
Chris
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