"About two-thirds of the American population is overweight, and of those, half are already obese.The diet industry is the visible sign of a looming public health problem." That is, weight controlling is very important for human beings; if you want to have healthy body, you have to control your weight and take exercise. Do not too depend on low-fat and fat-free products because consumers into believing that such products contained fewer calories, causing them to eat even more. Therefore, if we want to have perfect figure, balanced diet and regular exercise is our best choice.
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Hi Lily! Just to remind you, you're still behind in your posts, but you can catch up to the requisite 39 or more posts this week before midnight on Sunday.
Not bad writing, though there are still some errors. How many people are there who want one perfect figure? Diet is countable. You don't tell whose quote you feature at the beginning. "Do not depend too much on low-fat. . ." This sentence is mixed up; what is the real subject? Is it missing a second subject? How about this:
"Don't depend too much on low-fat or fat-free products, because they fool consumers into believing that such products contain fewer calories; this causes them to eat even more than they would normally."
Remember, reread your post after writing it, with your 'red pen' in your mind, looking for discrepancies.
Take care; see you next week.
Chris
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